Framing Statement:

Upon naturally returning to my essay to perform some local revisions, my grammatical/typical errors jump out on the page as I spew out whatever I can during the first draft. I attempt to sound intellectual when I write, but sometimes It either does not work out, or doesn’t sound right. For instance, in my first draft of Project #1 I wrote: “Food has been a happening since the beginning of time itself.” As I returned to my essay, I read this out loud thinking, I’m going to have to change that. And so I did. I revised my poorly stated sentence, and transformed it into: “Food has been a part of life and existence since the beginning of time”. This made me sound less like I was trying to sound smart, and more like I had an idea of what I wanted to say. But, changing the structure of my sentences are not the only revisions made throughout revisiting my paper. As well, the structures of my paragraphs are being revised, and reconstructed from one bulky paragraph, to multiple paragraphs. Included in these paragraphs are Barclay paragraphs, which are I Incorporate during local revisions. When forming my Barclay’s paragraphs, I need to make sure my sources meet MLA guidelines. I am able to demonstrate this on multiple occasions throughout Project #1. One example appears in the second paragraph of my final draft, in which I utilize a quote from Lizzie Widdicombe’s article that read “People have been eating meat for two million years… They’re hardwired to love meat, and they love the trappings of meat… ” (Widdicombe 10) Before local revisions, this paragraph had not yet included any of the sources required for the project. However, upon local revisions I was able to not only fix small errors, but also create writing capable of meeting MLA guidelines.