Project 2:
Justyn: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PeNyjWH12azFcjI4n43EPEwhg6BN728rUHkW0pFkHBQ/edit
Eliza: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BcYJRKxFXgn4mJBlacVcVySWsUNckl62NbaGUxh0dko/edit
Project 3:
Nadya: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NVXkjDnm50wuxfTFNv_QziDgpBWXsNGWEmZKdpuAW1s/edit (Feedback Letter: A very strong essay. You come off a little aggressive toward the American culture, but you make valid points in doing so. There was one instance in the essay where I feel that you could have stuck with one topic instead of jumping to the next, regarding technology. Later, towards the end of the draft, I notice you return to discussing technology again, and I feel that if you just make that one paragraph/topic it will be easier to understand/make the connection. Other than that, your passion shows throughout the essay, and your strong opinion takes up a majority of the essay. You include Pollan into your essay very smoothly, but I want to know more on your thoughts about our peer’s essays.
Rachel: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13uetuUu-NQi5bHHzr2vKrsDmLHH2Ny3Bgv-LujNUx0E/edit (Feedback Letter: Overall, the essay is great start. My only, and biggest concern is a lack of elaboration in some parts. For instance, you often display your thoughts/opinions throughout the essay, but you do not necessarily explain why you these ideas consume you. You hit on a lot of really strong points that made me consider things more deeply, which made me want the entire essay to be of similarity. I feel that if you just make better connections, and better explain your opinion, and the basis of your opinion, your essay will be much stronger.)
